4 Writer’s Platform Building–Flash Fiction Challenge.

The shadows crept across the wall. For a moment she was surprised she could still see them, in this dark.

She struggled to lift her head, caught in the moment between then and now.

Then, she’d been reading, snuggled in the duvet, eye-deep in Bronte, her all-time favourite. Vince had set her up for a luxurious night without him. His home-cooked pasta, a bubbly bath with that huge goblet of Minot, the room romantically strewn with those big chocolate and vanilla scented candles.

Then, he’d even brought out the special edition book, and tucked her into their bed as he’d opened the window to let the angels in, he’d said. Because she loved angels. And reading. And feeling all cushy and safe swaddled in the duvet, head buzzing with too much luxury, but warm against the cold night air.

Now, she’d wished she’d never woken up.

Now flaring pain tore up her nerves as she pushed at the duvet melted into her. Through glazing-dry eyes, she looked at what used to be her hands out there, all ash and blister. For a moment she was surprised she could still see them, in this dark.

Orange, red, golden agony.

Everything faded.


 

The above was for the First Campaigner Challenge. I managed to check off all the challenge items below. You can read other’s work via the Mr Linky widget at the bottom of the challenge post here.

I’m No. 65 on this linky widget – ‘like’ me if your enjoyed it.

Write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “Shadows crept across the wall”. These five words will be included in the word count.

If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional), do one or more of these:

  • end the story with the words: “everything faded.” (also included in the word count)
  • include the word “orange” in the story
  • write in the same genre you normally write
  • make your story 200 words exactly!

30 thoughts on “4 Writer’s Platform Building–Flash Fiction Challenge.

  1. Whoa. Wait a second. I’m so confused! What happened to her hands!? ” His home-cooked pasta, a bubbly bath with that huge goblet of Minot, the room romantically strewn with those big chocolate and vanilla scented candles.” I loved that line. Very nice description 🙂

    I’m entry #19

    1. Thanks to all for the nice comments so far. I have some doubt over whether this small piece works as efficiently as I would like, but am learning from the experience.

      Just realising, this is 1. my first piece of flash fiction ever, and 2. the first time I’ve published anything of mine on the blog.

      You guys have made it easier than it seems.

  2. Haunting stuff… cosy night in went badly wrong. Now I’d like to know more about Vince’s motive. I like your repetition of the “for a moment” line too, that adds to the eerie effect.

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